Friday, March 16, 2012

Happy Anniversary

‎100 word story. my first effort. 

 He came home. She waited up for him. Opened the door for him. Did not talk to him. He sat on the sofa. Did not loosen tie or unbutton shirt. She got him water. Asked about food. He lied about having eaten already. She did not protest. They went away to their respective rooms.
He entered his room. There were red roses. And a familiar handwriting “Happy Anniversary.” She got to her room. Her favourite white roses. And a familiar handwriting “happy anniversary.”

10 comments:

Chiya said...

Good effort, keep it coming.
Can't stop smiling :)

Onkar said...

Excellent. Shows how things have become mechanical.

Id it is said...

A hundred word story..interesting : )
"He lied about having eaten already." That part doesn't fit in, all the rest builds up to the end.

How do we know said...

Hi chiya: why smiling???

Onkar sir: thank you!

Hi Id: :-) wrote a longish comment to explain that eating bit, then let it be :-)

Himanshu Tandon said...

Interesting..and I guess I could follow 'he lied about having eaten already' and your following it up with 'she did not protest'

Waiting for more to come..

my space said...

good..do you know what I noticed first ? The Girl wrote H and A capital n the guy uesd the small case !! Eccentric ? That I am ...but it got me thinking .....WHY?

How do we know said...

hi HT: :-) why do u want even more loneliness splashed on this page? read the good stuff..

hi my space: i guess, bcs women mind their ps and qs a lot more.. i didnt realise..went back to check after ur comment :-)

Indian Home Maker said...

Anniversary is just another day I think - unless one wants to celebrate it or observe it, how does it even matter? It's just a date.

Nicely written story!

How do we know said...

hi ihm :-) hmm. thats a perspective too..

You Know Me Very Well said...

Good one. Just goes on to show how relationships r shrinking but still coexisting. And the 100 words helps as there may not be more time for details :)