Thursday, December 01, 2011

Pain

pain
like water
fills up
the ocean
and the thimble

pain
like water
takes the shape of
every mould
the heart makes
for itself.

pain
like water
makes up
60% of
me.


11 comments:

  1. and pain like water is essential for life..

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  2. Pain, unlike water, has bitter taste. :)

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  3. Pain like water
    freezes over
    when life turn cold

    Pain like water
    gushes out
    from eyes when sore

    and finally

    Pain like water
    mixes well
    with my evening scotch :)

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  4. hi chiya: i LOVE when u take a metaphor and develop it... ur one line kind of turns the post on its head, doesnt it :-) lovely.

    hi richa: :-) and an even bitter after taste...

    hi HT: as usual, YOU EXCEL YOURSELF. how do u develop these metaphors better than i can imagine? the last one is just too good.

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  5. Pain does not make up 60% of you...you think pain makes up 60% of you!!

    Thoughts are you best friends...thoughts are your worst enemy. They can take you from a sunlit day to a rainy night within a moment.

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  6. Pain unlike water,
    Feeds on itself,
    and grows more and more..

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  7. hi mayz: and some ppl are just happier in the rain. some ppl prefer the sun.

    Hi frog in well: yes. that is true too.

    hi varun: you bet they are. at 95% water, for sure!

    onkar sir: thank you!

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  8. gosh you are a fine poet....

    i know the pain you speak of. i've carried it too, for too long. 60%. i think that means change is calling you; that 40% knows better.

    your comments here are great. i'm glad i've come by.

    xoxo
    kj

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  9. hi kj: :-) thank you.. that 40% knows better? :-) i wish!!

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